damn, I don't know how to give a critique, but this looks really good! Uh, the hair looks a little... moulded? cant think of the word! like, it doesn't flow as well as normal hair should, unless you wanted it that way, because of hair gel? if that's not it though, maybe you could try to make it flow a bit better, if that makes sense? I love all the colours, and the forshortening's great! the pose is slightly wooden; as in the context of hair, try to make the limbs flow, like body parts would.
if you need help with poses, heres a great artist: senshistock.deviantart.com/
they have poses for pretty much EVERYTHING.
god, I feel like such a hypocrite, pointing out these things when I have MAJOR problems with both of these myself. I'm trying to help, even if it doesn't seem like it!
again, great work!x
it doesn't look like a plastic doll! there are just things that need a bit of work. we all have our limitations, but these are the things we improve and when we get better, it feels twice as good than if we had been good at it in the first place, you know?